Stratages For Revision

As I was reading through the text it gave me some different ways of looking at revision.Even though I try to use as many techniques in writing as I possibly can.I tend to read my text over and over again when I'm writing.This tends to keep me on track and hearing some sentences over in my head again seems to helps me work out so paragraphs.Sometimes it helps you to put logic to the paragraph.I always have someone at least proof read any material I hand in for a class project.Getting others opinions seems to work well for me.Good criticism some times can make you look in a different direction.But keeping the reader interested and staying coherent is so important,because everyone knows if you can't follow the story you usually loose interest.At that point it doesn't matter what message the writer is trying to get across.

I Have a Dream

This was the first time I got actually sat down to read this full speech. I have heard pieces and parts but never the full thing. I have to say this piece is very motivational and deep. It is very strong and gets its point across very well as well as easy. I believe everyone knows of this speech and I believe everyone should sit down to read it also. Maybe one day all the points he talks about will come true and we can live in a better world. Martin Luther King Jr. was a very huge part in American history, and this speech shows why.

I have a dream

This is one of the best speeches that has ever been spoken. I once heard this speech in high school. The intensity and loudness behind the words he said was astonishing. I for one like this piece a lot its about the history of this nation. Its about the rights that Americans should get regardless of race and gender. It was a very good piece. It hit me in the heart and not a lot of pieces of work does that. It is flawless.

Strategies for Revision

I never really looked at revision in the way the book describes. I think I try to do my revisions as I go along more so than at the end. The guidelines for objective were very helpful. They helped me take a better look at my writing. Questioning ones self is hard to do but I can see how it can make you a better writer. I am very much a person who likes others to read my drafts. It gives me great insight and also can help me see critical mistakes. I always allow different people to read my papers, their response makes a huge impact on how I revise it.

I Have A Dream

Having read this before it was much easier to see things I may have missed the first time. The writing style is very good and easily understood. I think that is one of the best motivational speeches ever and that Martin Luther King, Jr. was an inspiration to all and still is a big influence today. He uses language that is easily understood and makes sense. We all want freedom and his words make us want it more. We all want to be treated the same, no matter if it is at work, on the street or even in a restaurant. I don’t think that this applies to just skin color either. I believe that the author tries to make us see that it can transformed into any situation. Disability, gender, color, wealth or any other separation we can make can be fit into I Have A Dream. The person in a wheelchair has a dream. The mother who wants to work outside the home, has a dream. The coal miner’s daughter has a dream. Different as their dreams may be, they have them and should be able to pursue them without interference.

I Have A Dream

This is my first time reading the full speech of Martin Luther King Jr., and I must say I'm surprised. His writing style is great. He persuades the crowd so well. As Christy said, I really thought it said "I have a dream about..." dozens of times. But in actuality, he uses evidence to support everything he says. This was a very interesting piece and I can't wait to read some other works just like this one.

I Have A Dream

Here is finally a reading that i completely understood. I had no problem reading King's speech, "I Have A Dream". This is my first time actually reading the whole speech, and it's nice to know that it wasn't all about, "I have a dream-this and I have a dream-that". His speech contained evidence (the lie in the Constitution) for his argument and a solution to the problem that America was dealing with at the time. I really enjoyed the metaphors used to compare the Declaration of Independence and the Constitution with a "bad check" to the blacks that came back as "insufficient funds". It's amazing how one man envisioned what he wanted the future to look like, and made a difference by sharing his vision into other's thoughts.

I Have a Deam

I knew this was going to be a very good reading because Martin Luther King was a great speaker.So naturally the writing was going to be pretty powerful. I'm not sure there's much I can say that hasn't already been said about the men.He clearly stays on topic and knows how to use words to get his message across. He uses some good fact to back up his claim of racial inequality.I know we have a long way to go before every human being on the planet no matter what race,color,or gender truly become equal.But I have faith in our youth.This is where I feel the dream can become reality for all mankind.

Whats wrong with animal rights

This reading was very confusing. I didn't understand the argument. Was it that he was for animal rights or against it. For example, when he talked about the humane society I still didn't understand if he was against it or not. I thought the humane society was a good thing, but purposed that they were bad and that they killed dogs. Which in some cases they do to stop the animal from suffering and in case the dog is to blood thirsty. Over all the writing was good but very hard to follow.

What's Wrong With Animal Rights?

To agree with Vickie, this reading was one of the more difficult I've read thus far. The author, often times, lost me with explanations of random things. I'm a firm believer in animal rights, but I think that this piece of writing was written poorly. I think if the author used sub headings, this piece would've been so much better.

What’s Wrong With Animal Rights

This was a difficult read for me. It seemed to be confusing and drawn out. I am all for animals rights but she seemed to make no sense. She uses big words, which I feel were to show intimidation. I guess I really didn’t understand it enough to make out what she was trying to say. I think my lack of understanding led me to not like this passage so much.

The End of the World as We Know Them

Now here was a reading that I very much enjoyed. I have feelings almost identical to the author’s so winning me over wasn’t hard but I bet he won a whole lot more over.

I liked how he used other societies and compared them to ours. It really does make sense. Knowing and seeing how the 5 piece checklist works sheds new light on how we are destroying ourselves. How we have become our own worst enemy. You can see how changes in our environment impact our future every day. Global warming is becoming more of an issue every day. Why build new dwellings for families and businesses, when there are so many of them available for use. Oh that’s right we have got this incesible need to have something better that the person next door. To keep up with the Jones’ so to speak. The author also mentions our interference in other countries problems. Do we need to take care of them or ourselves? We spend tons of money on wars that we should not be involved in and fighting other peoples battles that we don’t seem get the big picture in our country. We have men, women and children homeless, starving and barely surviving and what do we do about that? Absolutely nothing! We sit back and say that it’s their own fault. But is it? I don’t think so.

Overall, it was a very well written piece and I really liked it.

What's Wrong With Animal Rights

This essay has me confused now about what happiness truly is. The author explains happiness in human terms, and then went on saying animal rights group didn't understand what hapiness is to animals. I enjoyed the example used of the author's relationship with her dog Drummer. She showed how Drummer gets happiness from their trusting relationship. Due to their strong relationship she feels she should be the only person granting Drummer's rights. I'm not much of a pet lover so I didn't enjoy this reading.

Whats Wrong With Animal Rights

I am going to have to agree with Karl, the author does use many confusing words. I have had the experience of going through people giving me a hard time about a pet. I use to own a pit bull just as the author does. The people in my neighborhood did not like the fact that I had owned a "harmful" dog, even though it was the most people friendly dog you would have ever met. Because of these people i was forced to give my dog up or our we could of lost our homeowners insurance. I think people judge things way to easily. They think that just because it was a pit bull it had to be vicious and mean. Thats not always the case. With pit bulls they are naturally nice. The only reason that some of them are mean is because they are trained to be this way. It is a shame that we have many of these stereotypes about a lot of different things in this world. I hope one day we can all just get over things and learn to deal with things better.

What's Wrong with Animal Rights

I felt the reading was a little hard to understand.The authors use of some words had me confused.Even though I understand most of what she was saying.Having animals all my life and being subjected to many of the animal rights activist radical point of view and propaganda doesn't help rectify the situation.Unfortunately there are people in the world that shouldn't have pets.These people will always cause tension between good pet owners and pet owners that abuse animals.I truly feel the activists in thier hearts are doing the right thing, but sometimes in some curcumstances the lesser of two evils would probably same the animals life.